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雅思考试:11.28雅思大作文7分范文及解析

作者: 2020-11-30 14:11 来源:深圳编辑
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2020年11月28日 雅思大作文题目:极限运动是否应禁止

观点类大作文,体育类话题:

Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?   有观点称极限运动如蹦极和滑雪很危险,所以要禁止。同意反对?

题目来源:2020年11月28日大陆雅思大作文(高度类似17年3月18日的亚太题目)

雅思考试:11.28雅思大作文7分范文及解析

思路解析:

这是一道观点类大作文,体育话题在雅思考试中不算多见,但是题目本身并不难,我们建议从反对的观点切入会更好写。

如果拆解题目,有两层内容可以探讨,一是极限运动是否危险,二是需不需要禁止。

极限运动确实有危险,不然就能叫做“极限”了。最主要的危险来自于两方面:一是未受过专业训练的人参加极限运动容易受伤,二是不可控的意外事故,而且一旦发生意外,当事人非常容易受到伤害甚至丧命。

但是,如果为了减少危险,并不需要采用禁止这么极端的方式。一是可以通过规划保护措施和专业人员来提高对当事人的防护,二是可以要求参与者必须参加专业训练提升自己应对危险的能力。

高分范文示例:

While it is an assertion that extreme sports are life-threatening and therefore should be proscribed, I will say this statement is not logical enough due to the irrelevant connection between the premise and conclusion.  

There seems to be reasons as to why dangerous sports warrant a ban. From those who think in this way, they assume that activities such as skydiving or skiing are more likely to cause serious injuries, providing the locations where the activities take place, whether these be the edge of cliff or remoted mountain areas, where rescue services are hard to reach. To complicate matters even more, the excitement of embracing life-threatening challenges is a magnet to young minds: researches shows that over 50% of respondents express their curiosity about thrilling experiences regardless of the probability of getting hurt.  

Plausible though the above statement seems, those decrying extreme sports are oblivious to the lack of causal links between their conclusion and premise – the apprehension about safety is not justified enough to entail the demise of extreme sports. The potential risks mentioned above can be avoided by various measures. For example, the government can legislate for training sessions for all participants of sky diving or skiing; other protective measures consist of backup parachutes and the company of coaches – all these approaches serve to reduce the potential risks. Given these alternative options, it is unnecessary to ban dangerous sports solely because of the safety worry.

In conclusion, it is my conclusion therefore, it is simplistic to appeal for prohibition on dangerous sport activities simply due to the safety concern while ignoring alternative solutions.

4、相关词汇和语法结构

life-threatening  有生命危险的

proscribe/prohibit  禁止  

thrilling  惊险的

apprehension  担忧

demise  终结  

legislate  立法

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