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2019.10.19 独立写作题目：Since it works well to use technological equipment (like computers) in school days, some people think that the time young students (6-12 years old) spend using technology in school should not be limited; others claim the disadvantages and think the time should be limited (one hour or less).Which of the two views do you agree with?
如果不充分回应6-12 years old，在内容上失分。
如果不充分回应one hour or less，在内容上失分。
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两个idea都是从让步切入，再找出让步内容的漏洞。在分析漏洞后转入论证自己的立场。
“讲道理”论证：理性分析
The visual and audio effects are the advantages of the technological facilitators. They present information in a vivid way, and children may learn with fun. Also, some handy devices allow children to learn in a kinesthetic way, since children can tab and swipe on the interactive screen to make things move and act out what they are learning. However, learners of young ages, between 6 and 12, can easily lose their focus. Their curiosity, provoked by the colorful and verbal presentation, may not be for the content displayed on the screen but for the “magic” that enables the device to interact with them. This curiosity is generated as the time of use extends, and the proposed time limit, the one hour, is the necessary intervention that prevents the displaced focus just at the right time.
“举例子”论证：呈现现象/营造画面
Second, a common conception is that using those devices increases learning efficiency. However, there may be no concrete evidence to substantiate the idea. As a matter of fact, young learners may be distracted during their use of laptops, tablets, and mobile phones. For example, they activate many functions of those devices that are unrelated to their learning the school subject. A child may spend a whole afternoon researching the camera of a mobile phone or the many apps on the phone and learns merely what can be learned within less than an hour if his or her focus is concentrated on the subject. Even though children’s attention may not be diverted by the many functions, it may deviate when children browse the Internet, which provides too much information.
顺延第二点进一步论证the one-hour limit
In fact, efficient learning is unlikely unless there is a time limit. Pushed by the time limit, students may hurry up to finish what they do, and manipulated by the limited length of use, students may make every minute worthwhile rather than waste time on the irrelevant matters.
