9月19日托福独立写作“ Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

People who cannot accept criticism will not succeed working in team.”

题目拆解：

本题是一个双重否定等于肯定的题， 即只有接受批评才能在团体中获得成功。因此破题应该从意见采纳与团队合作进行切入。因此采用两个基本角度：融入群体与改善自己。

 Introduction

Teamwork in which people could gather to discuss or resolve tasks either in school or workplace is quite common. In order to maintain effective group work, listening to others’ words including negative ones is the necessity and determinant for success.【这里的开头主要做两件事：引入话题+陈述观点】

Body

First of all, hardly can an overconfident individual get involved in the group. In order to inspire more sparkles, people work in teams to ensure the collision of ideas. In other words, the more thoughts members have, the more conflicts happen among them. In this case, being endurable to negative comment from partners is a prerequisite in getting along with others in the team.【一到两句话把中心句说理说明白】Take my colleague Allen as an example. He graduated from a prestigious university with honorary degree, which contributed to his arrogance towards other’s feedback. Every time when the group meeting was held, he presented the idea in a supercilious way. Worse, if his ideas are pointed out to be impractical, instead of embracing the comment, he will be indignant and even brutally arguing with other team members. After several times, he was excluded from the team for the obstacle he caused for the collaboration in the whole project.【举个贴切的例子比重复说理有说服力得多】

True, blunt criticism hurts. It is never comfortable for one to peacefully accept the blame especially when the proposal is elaborated. A strong sense of failure would be triggered and predominant for the presenter, but what we should envisage is that this is the only way for any successful group work where along with the praise there must be criticism. Unlike being frustrated, we are ought to have an open mind for all possible evaluation. Or the work may be stuck due to the slide into a bad feeling even distrust, which will greatly impede group work. 【小做个让步反向论证】

Instead, the words even in blaming tone may all derive from the sincere to forge the final success. One of the previous projects I collaborated with my classmates can best exemplify this. In order to get an A for our teamwork, they would spare no effort but gave me the straightforward comment. At first, I felt very upset and thought they must be on purpose until I followed their words to make a change. Things were getting much better and the final assessment was excellent for all of us. It is the blunt comment from my teams that promotes the healthy relationship between us, as well as the promising result.【再跟进一个正面论述的例子补充】

 Ending

In a nutshell, if one were unable to be open-minded to all feedback from teammates, the final success would be unable to achieve. Only with an inclusive attitude can people get the success through the group.【一到两句话总结全文】