想绝大多数语言考试一样，托福写作相对于托福考试来说是最让考生头疼的一个项目，因为想要提升用词质量还是需要通过长时间的积累和训练才行，而且大多数学生也不知道从哪里下手，所以为了给同学们更加直白的解说，下面结合一些实例为大家具体的分析一下。

托福写作提升用词质量水平改写实例分析

1.Original：We know that sometimes success is measured by how much money you earn.

Revised：It does not surprise us to discover that sometimes success is measured in terms of the money you earn.

点评：know是非常初级的词汇，作文中出现I believe that，I know that这样的表达只能体现考生写作技巧的稚嫩，用It does not surprise us to discover that替换We know that并没有改变原句的含义，却使全句顿时增添了亮点。

2.Original：We all know that most factories would be of no use if there were not clean water supply.

Revised：It goes without saying that most factories would be of no use if there were not clean water supply.

托福写作点评：同上例一样know这样的初级词汇应避免在作文中使用，It goes without saying that是一个固定结构，意思是"是不言而喻的"，常在作文中用来引经据典或表明一个尽人皆知的道理，类似的表达还有：

An old saying goes that

Proverb goes that

It is universally acknowledged that

It is generally accepted that

3.Original：Some other people think that people should read extensively.

Revised：Another position says that people should read extensively.

点评：同know一样think也应该尽量避免使用，修改后的句子中是用Another position says that代替think提出另一种观点，也可以用hold a point of view，hold the opinion这样的短语替换。

4.Original：The unexpected win of the match give us confidence.

Revised：The unexpected win of the match boost our confidence.

点评：give也属于英语中最初级、最基本的词汇，也是中国学生最喜欢在托福独立写作中应用的词。这个词只表示"给，给予"这个动作，不涉及动作的性质和状态，若表示增添信心增强士气，比较地道的说法是用boost confidence/morale，如：The change of management has boosted morale throughout the company. 管理模式的改变使整个公司上下士气倍受鼓舞。

5.Original：The use of drugs has increased greatly in the last ten years.

Revised：The use of drugs has increased significantly in the last ten years.

点评：greatly是一般用语表示程度高、"很、非常"，使用相当普遍而没有新意，在托福独立写作中应尽量避免使用这些通俗而又陈旧的词汇，应换用一些更加正式更有说服力的词语，例如significantly表示达到了非常重要的或可观的程度，"重大的、可观的"，能够具体说明药品使用方面增长幅度巨大，这里significantly还可以替换成considerably、tremendously等，同样具有不错的表达效果。

通过上述的分析大家对托福写作的词汇运用有了一些了解，相信也认识到素材和句型对托福文章的重要性了吧，贵在同学的积累，只有结合高分句型和丰富的素材你的托福写作的成绩才会有更好的提升。

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