雅思高分大作文“三大核心技巧”

针对强化雅思大作文，高分三个核心技巧。

一、 词汇的准确

1. 避免空洞的单词和词组：删掉或替换

2. 避免词汇的重复：代词替换；词性替换；同义替换

二、句子：语法结构的适度

1. 简单句的使用：足以表达句意时使用

2. 从句的使用：根据句子的逻辑关系选择恰当的从句去表达

三、段落：论证细节的充足

1. 根据论点讲解具体的原因或影响

2. 依据抽象性的论点扩展具体的例子

词汇的准确

一、避免空洞的单词和词组: 删掉或替换

1.1当空洞的单词和词组不能为句子带来任何相关或者重要的信息时，完全可以删掉。比如下面的句子：

When all things are considered, young adults of today live more satisfying lives than those of their parents, in my opinion.

这句话中的“When all things are considered”和“ in my opinion” 都显得多余，完全可以去掉，所以改为：

Young adults of today live more satisfying lives than their parents.

1.2 有些空洞或者繁琐的表达可以进行替换，例如：

Due to the fact that the inspiration is extremely significant for artists to create truly original works,

the government should give enough freedom to them to encourage and stimulate their creation.

“due to the fact that” 就是一个典型的繁琐的表达，可以用更加地道简单的表达because来替换：

Because the inspiration is extremely significant for artists to create the truly original works, the government should give enough freedom to them to encourage and stimulate their creation.

有些烤鸭在备考时，甚至有些老师课上的教学，为了凑字数或者盲目替换表达，故意使用类似上文例子中的:When all things are considered或者due to the fact that这样的表达。

认为这样看起来比because，却不知是盲目替换。

实质上，对于追求高分的学员来说，这种做法是没有必要的，高分写作词汇的重点是简洁地道。

二、避免词汇的重复

2.1使用代词替换前面所提到的词

Even though distance learning is different from traditional college education, distance learning has some advantages in some aspects.

从句里面有提到distance learning，所以后面主句中的distance learning应该用代词更好，改为：

Even though distance learning is different from traditional college education, it has some advantages in some aspects.

2.2 巧用词性转换来避免词汇的重复

很多时候，我们在主体段论证过程中已经使用了所有的近义词，此时在结尾段来总结观点可以通过词性的转换来体现词汇的丰富，

如在写prison对于解决犯罪的有效性时，

其中有一个观点是：This kind of punishment has a deterrent effect on either prospective offenders or habitual offenders.

文章的结尾段会把主体段之前提到的观点进行总结，以更好地重申自己的观点，

这个时候deterrent之前用到过，为了避免重复我们可以使用其动词形式：

Overall, I agree that the harsh penalty can deter crimes.

2.3 使用同义词来替换前面提到过的词

This kind of punishment has a deterrent effect on either prospective offenders or habitual offenders.

Imprisonment means that criminals will lose freedom, a consequence that no rational person is willing to take.

前面罪犯使用的是offenders,后面再次提到时使用的是其近义词criminals来避免重复。

2.4 论证的时候可以使用对论点具体化的下义词来替换

One of the major issues of allowing teenagers to drive is reckless driving.

如果我们接着这个论点句继续写论证，想要直接替换reckless driving这个词是有难度。

但是如果我们知识储备足够，就可以利用它的下义词来替换,比如：

Because of the immaturity of most teenagers, they tend to drive while ignoring traffic rules.

In addition, road raging and excessive speeding are also common phenomena among younger drivers.

这句话里：

drive while ignoring traffic rules, road raging, excessive speeding

都是reckless driving的下义替换词。

当然，正如我前面提到的，这点使用有难度，很考验大家本身的基本功。

句子：语法结构的适度：不要一味追求所谓的从句或加分句型，而是要在适合的时候选择适合的句型进行表达。

一、

简单句的使用

如果一个简单句能够表达句意，那么就使用该简单句，例如：

If high school students take part in voluntary work actively,

it can expand their mind.

Taking part in voluntary work actively can expand students’ mind.

句话虽然是主从复合句（状语从句），但是显得啰嗦、赘余，完全没必要。

第二句话虽然从语法结构上来讲是一个简单句，但胜在言简意赅，准确地使用了动名词做主语，非常到位！

二、从句使用：当一句话包含较多信息，一个简单句不能表达出所有意思的时候，我们就可以根据这句话的逻辑关系，来选择恰当的从句。

例如，想要表达：有些孩子喜欢吃快餐，因为他们身边每天都充斥着大量的快餐广告，

先分析这句话想要表达的逻辑关系（因果关系），然后用能够表达这种逻辑的从句描写出来：

2.1  状语从句：

Some children like fast food because they are overwhelmed by fast food advertisements every day.

2.2  定语从句：

a.Children are overwhelmed by fast food advertisements every day, as a result of which, they like fast food.

b.Children are overwhelmed by fast food advertisements every day, which leads them to like fast food.

段落：论证细节的充足

一、论证细节最忌讳的两点论证内容的重复和逻辑的跳跃，会使论证细节显得太少或者太空，论点就很难有说服力，文章就不可能拿高分。

1.1 我们先来感受一下什么是内容的单纯重复

It is harmful for young people to watch numerous violent films because frequent exposure to this kind of movies can make them imitate this violent behavior.

Thus, the likelihood of youth crimes increases greatly because they become more and more violent due to frequent contact with violent films.

这句话里：numerous violent films, frequent exposure to this kind of movie以及frequent contact with violent films

内容是重复的，可以去掉最后一个。

1.2 再来体会一下什么是逻辑的跳跃

例如在讨论坐牢对于解决犯罪问题的缺点时，有的学生这样写道：

If they are sentenced to prison, they are likely to reoffend after being released, which can pose a threat to other members of society.

这句话中假设的逻辑关系非常牵强：

“如果罪犯从监狱释放出来，他们很可能会再犯罪”这是因为其中的具体原因没有表达出来，使得假设的条件和对应的结果从逻辑上来看很跳跃。

二、如何保证论证细节的充足怎样才能避免内容的单纯重复和逻辑的跳跃，让论证细节充足有力呢？

多参考考官的范文，去分析文章中用到的论点和其对应的论证细节，

会发现避免以上两种问题，从而使论证细节更充足的方法主要有以下两种：

2.1 根据论点讲解具体的原因或影响

我们以刚才的例子来讲解：

It is harmful for young people to watch numerous violent films because frequent exposure to this kind of movies can make them imitate this violent behavior. Thus, the likelihood of youth crimes increases greatly because they become more and more violent due to frequent contact with violent films.

这里的论证内容为什么会重复，因为它忽略了具体原因的分析：为什么年轻人会模仿？是不是所有的年轻人都会模仿？

其实，年轻人模仿的原因可能是电影里的暴力行为是明星所实施的，觉得暴力是魅力的体现。

并且，电影里的暴力是解决问题的一种手段，年轻人会认为暴力在现实生活中是可以解决一些问题的。

如果把这些原因写上去，论证细节就会充足有力，就不会给人“炒现菜”的感觉：

It is harmful for young people to watch numerous violent films because frequent exposure to this kind of movies can make them imitate this violent behavior.

Precisely, the violence glorified in the film by featuring famous starts usually seems as cool and charming behavior rather than dangerous and illegal one.

It is also shown as a method of solving problems in the film. Not surprisingly, teenagers whose ability of distinguishing the right from wrong is poor are liable to simulate such kind of violent acts.

同理，如果把坐牢后罪犯会再犯罪的具体原因或影响说清楚，

就不会出现逻辑上的跳跃了，所以：

If they are sentenced to prison, they are likely to reoffend after being released, which can pose a threat to other members of society.

可以改为：

If they are sentenced to prison, not taught about the moral education and job skills, they are likely to reoffend after being released because they have not truly realized the roots of their offence and cannot making a living.

2.2 依据抽象性的论点扩展具体的例子：

例如在论证大学生学习理论知识的必要性时，有一个观点是围绕有助于其就业展开，如果能够举一个具体的学科以及这门学科是如何帮助大学生提高就业竞争力的话，论证内容无疑会更有说服力。

所以，我们可以这样去写：

Mastering theoretical knowledge is a competitive edge for university students looking for jobs. For example, students who acquire mathematical skills at school can learn how to build models to analyze data at university and work as financial analysts and engineers after they graduate.

这里举出的例子：

数学使大学生具备了建模的技能，让大学生能够胜任和数学相关的职位，使前面抽象的观点更加具体化、细节化。